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Genre 1
 * Original || Revision || Explaination ||
 * That in the year of our Lord || That, in the year of our Lord || There needs to be a comma because there needs to be a break in the sentence ||
 * Scotland was where. || Eliminate the was and the where || This is because it is unecessary for me to have in my project. ||
 * Margret Crawford and Malcolm Wallace || Add a comma between and and Malcolm || because without it, there would be no break in the sentence and would just be considered a run on sentence ||

Genre 2
 * Original || Revision || Explaination ||
 * You are invited to witness before God, || Add a comma between witness and before. || Because I need a break in the sentence so that it is a run on sentence. ||
 * The marriage between man and women || between man and woman || Because it is only one woman that is getting married. ||
 * Hugh Braidfute,, and William Wallace || Only need one comma || It is unneccessary to have two commas in that sentence. ||

Genre 3
 * Original || Revision || Explaination ||
 * Marion Braidifute's wife || Change wife to man || This is because I am talking about her husband, not her wife. I used the wrong word choice. ||
 * Had broken out. || Eliminate had and change broken to broke || Because I want to make the scene more present and if I use had, it would look like it was in the past tense. ||
 * Between the Scotsmen and the English soldier. || Make the word soldier plural. || I am talking about more than one soldier in my newspaper article. ||

Genre 4
 * Original || Revision || Explaination ||
 * cavalry. But || Put a comma between cavalry and but || This is because it would make it into a fragmented sentence. ||
 * We can come together as an army. Or we will die as individuals || Comma between army or. || Because then it would be a fragmented sentence. Plus, but is not a started in the sentence. ||
 * thing, every man dies || period between thing and every. || Because this would just create a run on sentence. ||