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Genre 1

Original	Revision	Explaination
That in the year of our Lord	That, in the year of our Lord	There needs to be a comma because there needs to be a break in the sentence
Scotland was where.	Eliminate the was and the where	This is because it is unecessary for me to have in my project.
Margret Crawford and Malcolm Wallace	Add a comma between and and Malcolm	because without it, there would be no break in the sentence and would just be considered a run on sentence

Genre 2

Original	Revision	Explaination
You are invited to witness before God,	Add a comma between witness and before.	Because I need a break in the sentence so that it is a run on sentence.
The marriage between man and women	between man and woman	Because it is only one woman that is getting married.
Hugh Braidfute,, and William Wallace	Only need one comma	It is unneccessary to have two commas in that sentence.

Genre 3

Original	Revision	Explaination
Marion Braidifute's wife	Change wife to man	This is because I am talking about her husband, not her wife. I used the wrong word choice.
Had broken out.	Eliminate had and change broken to broke	Because I want to make the scene more present and if I use had, it would look like it was in the past tense.
Between the Scotsmen and the English soldier.	Make the word soldier plural.	I am talking about more than one soldier in my newspaper article.

Genre 4

Original	Revision	Explaination
cavalry. But	Put a comma between cavalry and but	This is because it would make it into a fragmented sentence.
We can come together as an army. Or we will die as individuals	Comma between army or.	Because then it would be a fragmented sentence. Plus, but is not a started in the sentence.
thing, every man dies	period between thing and every.	Because this would just create a run on sentence.